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Model
CateCala
Posts: 5
Galveston, Texas, US


I'd like a serious critique of my portfolio. Where my strengths are and definitely where I need work. It would be most appreciated.
Mar 03 14 09:17 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Lee_Photography
Posts: 8,565
Minneapolis, Minnesota, US


Going to pick the photos I like best and maybe make some comments

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140303/16/531524bf523ba_m.jpg
Raise chin a bit, have the camera level with your eyes when it works out
Why, you might ask, look at the bottom of your eyes, notice how the white goes side to side
I am not a fan of wrinkled backgrounds
The bracelet closest to your wrist could be removed, the other works well with the mask

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140303/16/531524288fa20_m.jpg
You have such a different look in this image
I would love to have this image cropped just to photo right of your right shoulder; the photo would then highlight you more, remember this should be about the model

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140127/09/52e69daa8c959_m.jpg
Notice the white area at the bottom of your eyes
As far as your right arm, when I see that much arm really want to see all of your hand

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/131021/09/526559d5e5023_m.jpg
Looking at your eyes this looks like on camera flash, the down side is that you loose some of the 3D effect that other lighting gives
Watch your backgrounds, in this you have silver something running through you

Photos that do not make my positive list
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/131025/06/526a73e12f085_m.jpg
For me the shoes clash with the outfit
The pose of your legs is not flattering
[You have such an adorable face in this image]]

Only one photo from a look is best to post in portfolio

You have a killer look, wish you well
Mar 04 14 04:51 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Howard Tarragon
Posts: 167
BRONX, New York, US


You have a lovely face and figure and your portfolio or any other pictures should  allow others to see your best features in the best way. That said:

#1 Very nice art shot - can see why it was exhibited.
#2 Too many bangles, too close to the lens. Armpit shots not the best angle. In the larger version you can see 2 scratches on your breast (yes, people will be looking there) and the yes thing that Lee Photo pointed out.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/14 … f523ba.jpg

#3 For some reason, I'm thinking the top doesn't go with the veil - it's too much of a contrast -too black. It's distracting from your face.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140303/16/5315248f0080b_m.jpg

#4 I, too, would crop the picture from the right, but would leave some of the green door for color contrast. You look lovely here.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140303/16/531524288fa20_m.jpg

#5 Lovely.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140303/16/531523b74a58b_m.jpg

#6 Watch your backgrounds, you've got a flash bracket coming out of your armpit.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140303/16/5315233b4e307_m.jpg

#7 This is the clearest, best shot of your face. Relax your eyes, they're a little bit "deer in the headlights". The bangles are distracting.

#8 This is an undignified pose (especially with caption). Cropped to make it a head and chest shot and in to your shoulders would be very effective.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/131025/06/526a73e12f085_m.jpg

#9 Perfect! Are you actually a redhead? I see freckles and green eyes - usually a redhead. Would be great.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/131024/18/5269cfe68f3f3_m.jpg

#10 Very nice

#11 Very nice expression. Two distractions - 1. the white flower; 2. the white lights dead center in the pupils of your eyes (that can be fixed).
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/131021/09/526559d5e5023_m.jpg

#12  Same as above
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/131021/09/5265592811889_m.jpg

#13 This is beautiful. serene expression, eyes relaxed, looking straight at camera.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/131021/09/5265589804a52_m.jpg

#14  Another undignified pose. Crop up from top of arm lace and you have a lovely picture.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/131021/09/526557e54091d_m.jpg


#15 Look at the comment made in your portfolio. Can you see why? My only nitpick is the flower. Simple, elegant, all of your features are in plain sight and look their best.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/131021/09/526557233fdfa_m.jpg

Hope to see more shots in your portfolio. You are lovely.
Mar 05 14 11:35 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Howard Tarragon
Posts: 167
BRONX, New York, US


#2 *yes = eyes
Mar 05 14 11:58 am  Link  Quote 
Model
CateCala
Posts: 5
Galveston, Texas, US


Thank you all for the comments, critiques, and suggestions. I am aware about the legs... Those photos made me realize at the time that my work out routine for my legs was not doing me any favors. They looked fine while standing but otherwise... the muscle was a bit gross. I've since switched to a low weight/high rep routine that has produce more toned and less muscular legs. I'll also keep in mind about the poses!

Haha, I'm not a redhead. I'm actually a blonde, believe it or not. I used to dye my hair red in high school but I've switched to brown since then since I always loved the brown hair/green eyes combination.

Again, thank you for the critique and suggestion. I'm going to get a hold of a good friend of mine whose a photographer to see about cropping and editing some of these. When I get the finals back from my last shoot I'll cycle out an old pic for a new one.
Mar 05 14 12:41 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Howard Tarragon
Posts: 167
BRONX, New York, US


Who said anything about legs? It was the angle of the pose that was not good. Firm, toned legs are great. Women don't get bulky muscles unless they use stuff.
Mar 05 14 12:50 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
CateCala
Posts: 5
Galveston, Texas, US


Here is a cropped version of the red and green photo. Should I swap it out for this one? - http://www.bayareaphotoclub.org/gallery … ewsIndex=2
Mar 05 14 10:40 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
GNapp Studios
Posts: 6,197
Somerville, New Jersey, US


I really think you have a wonderful look, but every shot in your port gives me the feeling you are shy....too many clothes, hiding behind a wall, etc.

You just have to open up your look and personality a bit.
Mar 05 14 10:54 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Howard Tarragon
Posts: 167
BRONX, New York, US


OP Yes, swap it out - it is so much stronger! Look at how the green in your eyes shows and we can really see your face.
Mar 06 14 08:45 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Lee_Photography
Posts: 8,565
Minneapolis, Minnesota, US


CateCala wrote:
Here is a cropped version of the red and green photo. Should I swap it out for this one? - http://www.bayareaphotoclub.org/gallery … ewsIndex=2

Yes!

Mar 07 14 01:21 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
CateCala
Posts: 5
Galveston, Texas, US


GNapp Studios wrote:
I really think you have a wonderful look, but every shot in your port gives me the feeling you are shy....too many clothes, hiding behind a wall, etc.

You just have to open up your look and personality a bit.

Part of the problem was I had an event (which I rather not discuss in too much detail) that messed up my teeth. My front teeth look fine, aside from the gap, but a lot of my other teeth are in poor shape and I don't have the money to get them repaired/replaced. It makes me reluctant to open my mouth very much and thus I guess I look more timid. I'll try to open up more in other ways though as I definitely see what you mean!

EDIT: Removed a few pics, added some, going to add more. Hopefully my port is becoming more refined.

Mar 09 14 10:01 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Howard Tarragon
Posts: 167
BRONX, New York, US


I hope that you printed out your old portfolio so that you can see how much better your portfolio is now.  Things will only get better from here. All the best!
Mar 11 14 07:49 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
AJ_In_Atlanta
Posts: 12,658
Atlanta, Georgia, US


Really need a few full length images in it still, as pointed out all of them are very shy and hidden - not a great way to show a garment
Mar 11 14 07:59 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Jean Renard Photography
Posts: 2,043
Los Angeles, California, US


if at 22 you are going to try and do something real in the industry, you need to work with a few pros to start with or you will waste years and end up nowhere.

The shots are amateur level and will only appeal to fellow amateurs.  Everything from styling to technical issues matter. Once you raise the bar on your starting shots, then all new comers will need to meet or exceed it.

You should look at the folks who are doing what you want to do and use that as the goal.  Research your goals, find the right photographers to work with, even if you have to pay some and execute on your research.  That includes make up, styling, concepts and frankly getting the basics done like a simple headshot, beauty shot and full length.
I call it packaging, agencies used to be good at it, now almost none do it, even for non represented models, packaging their look is paramount to going anywhere other than having fun with a hobby.
Mar 11 14 01:46 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
CateCala
Posts: 5
Galveston, Texas, US


Added something new, removed somethings. Hopefully this port is a little more well rounded.
Apr 01 14 02:36 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
David Kirk
Posts: 4,436
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada


Your face is great.  Your portfolio is all over the place in terms of quality.

These are the keepers:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140309/22/531d50e93de1f_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/131021/09/526557233fdfa_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140303/21/531565b275833_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140309/22/531d4856493fd_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140303/16/531523b74a58b_m.jpg

It may sound harsh, but I think your portfolio would be much stronger if you cut it down to your top 5 or 6 photos and build up from there.

You have a beautiful face - one that I would love to shoot!
Apr 06 14 08:20 pm  Link  Quote 
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