Lela Jesse wrote:
Me please! I want to try to get more of a fresh start this year! Thank you!

Profile:
"I recently moved to Arcata, CA and I'm looking to start modeling as soon as possible. "
It's clear where you live.. you have your current city marked.. so this sentence is redudnant.

Portfolio:

lighting on this shot is crappy. i get the whole combining images thing.. but only when it's done right.. this is not done right. the center image gives you terrible shadows on your face. and the right image is blown out, and the left gives you a shiny chin.


The pose in this photo is too distorted. it comes off as an attempt at fashion. try working with a fashion photographer who wont shoot at such a crap angle. and a photographer who edits out the red knees. fashion is also about the facial expressions and eyes. in this your eyes are closed.


i've never been a fan of the whole keeping one or two colors out while muting the rest..



I would make this your avatar. your current one doesnt draw me in to want to check your portfolio.


Overall:

I think you are beautiful! you have a very european look. i would work with photographers who dont crop out your arms, top of your head.. and so on.

i would also like to see a well done headshot of you with minimual makeup (beauty shot) and a full length shot that doesnt make your body and legs look weird. you could definitely be working with better photographers. i know lots of photographers who would love to have you behind the camera!

I Ference Photography wrote:
Please, nitpick away!

i will get to you tomorrow.. because i know your work and i'm going to have to spend a decent amount of time looking for things to be wrong.

Lorayne York wrote:

Profile:
"I recently moved to Arcata, CA and I'm looking to start modeling as soon as possible. "
It's clear where you live.. you have your current city marked.. so this sentence is redudnant.

Portfolio:

lighting on this shot is crappy. i get the whole combining images thing.. but only when it's done right.. this is not done right. the center image gives you terrible shadows on your face. and the right image is blown out, and the left gives you a shiny chin.


The pose in this photo is too distorted. it comes off as an attempt at fashion. try working with a fashion photographer who wont shoot at such a crap angle. and a photographer who edits out the red knees. fashion is also about the facial expressions and eyes. in this your eyes are closed.


i've never been a fan of the whole keeping one or two colors out while muting the rest..



I would make this your avatar. your current one doesnt draw me in to want to check your portfolio.


Overall:

I think you are beautiful! you have a very european look. i would work with photographers who dont crop out your arms, top of your head.. and so on.

i would also like to see a well done headshot of you with minimual makeup (beauty shot) and a full length shot that doesnt make your body and legs look weird. you could definitely be working with better photographers. i know lots of photographers who would love to have you behind the camera!

Thank you very much for your critique!
Actually though, that first one was shot with film, as one image, so there wasn't any picking of images, to go through. It was an all for one effect. But I do understand what you are saying about it. 
Once again, Thank you very much!

Lorayne York wrote:

i will get to you tomorrow.. because i know your work and i'm going to have to spend a decent amount of time looking for things to be wrong.

Well then, I'm excited to see what you come up with! 

I Ference Photography wrote:
Please, nitpick away!

Soooo i have spent almost an entire day looking at your photos.. then taking a break and going back to see if i could find something.. needless to say i only found one image i didnt like.

this: https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/1 … 6695_m.jpg
18+
i think it's only because i've never been a fan of the shadows thing.. it's similiar to the light coming through blinds to me.. if that makes sense.

i also noticed you have a lot of images with the use of old chairs. whether it wheelchairs/rocking chairs/school chairs.. 10 out of 29 photos have a chair.. not including a sofa.

however your locations are amazing. i would love to shoot in any of them. i enjoyed reading the locations.. cause i dont think we have any abandoned schools around here

love the colors you have in your portfolio and the uniqueness about your images as well... wish i could be more critical.. but that's all i got damnit.

NicoleNudes wrote:
Please do

like your profile.. its short and to the point.

your portfolio...

here are my least favorite images:

All images 18+

https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/1 … 91b4_m.jpg
I dont like the blurriness of this photo and the fact that your stomach is blown out. you also have the same shoes in another photo, which in my opinion is better.

https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/1 … c1b8_m.jpg
this photo is too blown out for me.. and with the shadow of the shape of your boob on your other boob.. it's too distracting.  but i understand that it is a nice figure photo.

https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/1 … 0404_m.jpg
I think to make this photo better.. a thicker rope shouldve been used.. it wouldve made your facial expression that much better.. cause as it is right now.. it looks like youre chewing on a necklace.

my two favorite:
https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/1 … 0d34_m.jpg
LOVE your face in this.. soo beautiful. and i like that you can see your tattoo on your neck. your hair looks amazing too... i just love it. i wish i had this in my portfolio.

https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/1 … 5cf1_m.jpg
i love this for the arch in your back.. and yet you still look comfortable.. though im sure it mustve hurt. you just look so relaxed and your wet hair is perfect.. love it.

i enjoy looking through your portfolio. you lucky curvy lady, i am so jealous that i dont have the curves you do. i would love to see you do more nature nudes. i think you have the perfect body to do that.

Lorayne York wrote:

Soooo i have spent almost an entire day looking at your photos.. then taking a break and going back to see if i could find something.. needless to say i only found one image i didnt like.

this: https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/1 … 6695_m.jpg
18+
i think it's only because i've never been a fan of the shadows thing.. it's similiar to the light coming through blinds to me.. if that makes sense.

i also noticed you have a lot of images with the use of old chairs. whether it wheelchairs/rocking chairs/school chairs.. 10 out of 29 photos have a chair.. not including a sofa.

however your locations are amazing. i would love to shoot in any of them. i enjoyed reading the locations.. cause i dont think we have any abandoned schools around here

love the colors you have in your portfolio and the uniqueness about your images as well... wish i could be more critical.. but that's all i got damnit.

Well thank you kindly for your time; the critique is appreciated!  I'll take another look at that image in the context of the overall body of work I'm showing.

If you are ever in the area and would like to shoot, I'd love to work with you - your enthusiasm for my decrepit old buildings would show in every shot!  But be forewarned - I'll probably ask you to sit in a chair or two, as they are often among the only artifacts left behind in abandoned insane asylums. 

Lorayne York wrote:
If you're interested in ways i think you could improve, or what you are consistent with, just post in here.

Anyone is welcome, photographers, models, mua's, hairstylists, retouchers... and so on.

just remember that this is my opinion only. and i will probably nitpick your portfolio and profile.

I would love your opinion. Sock it to me.