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BorderlineBunny

Posts: 2201

Tulsa, Oklahoma, US

I've been working hard to up my skill level. I think I've hit the wall and have broken through it to a much better level than my previous work. I'd like critiques from professionals as to what I need to look into correcting or perfecting. Any advice is very much appreciated.
http://i1223.photobucket.com/albums/dd513/borderlinebunny/exam1.jpg

Close up:
http://i1223.photobucket.com/albums/dd513/borderlinebunny/close-1.jpg

Mar 30 12 09:27 am Link

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Jesse Stuckey

Posts: 101

Portsmouth, Rhode Island, US

The only thing that really stands out to me is the discrepancy in color between the face and from the neck down. The lower half is appearing to be more yellow to me, and there seems to be a bit of obvious magenta in the shadow right below her chin.

Mar 30 12 09:52 am Link

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BorderlineBunny

Posts: 2201

Tulsa, Oklahoma, US

Jesse Stuckey wrote:
The only thing that really stands out to me is the discrepancy in color between the face and from the neck down. The lower half is appearing to be more yellow to me, and there seems to be a bit of obvious magenta in the shadow right below her chin.

Yeah, I definitely see that now. Thank you.

Mar 30 12 09:57 am Link

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Jesse Stuckey

Posts: 101

Portsmouth, Rhode Island, US

BorderlineBunny wrote:

Yeah, I definitely see that now. Thank you.

No problem, it always helps to have a second pair of eyes smile

Mar 30 12 10:12 am Link

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K I S S P H O T O

Posts: 594

Swansea, Wales, United Kingdom

I think it would benefit from a slight highlight above her lip, just so her filtrum doesn't look so flat & long. x

Mar 30 12 10:23 am Link

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Jesse Stuckey

Posts: 101

Portsmouth, Rhode Island, US

DP

Mar 30 12 10:38 am Link

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BorderlineBunny

Posts: 2201

Tulsa, Oklahoma, US

Jesse Stuckey wrote:
DP

DP? I know of a few things that might mean. Dr. Pepper, Double Post, and Double something else, that I really don't think you're referring to. Haha.

Mar 30 12 11:04 am Link

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Andreea Cernestean

Posts: 495

Baia Mare, Maramureş, Romania

The shadows on her neck and body seem too dark compared to those on the face. Especially the neckline. A little d&b or opting for a dark background would reduce the contrast there.

Mar 30 12 11:10 am Link

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Robert LC

Posts: 944

Amsterdam, Noord-Holland, Netherlands

Did a good job and definitely your best in your port.

Few things you might consider
- ears, if it were a cosmetic ad beauty shot you'd probably get the request to slightly
reduce them

- hair could use some work (but it's a bit strange crop considering what they did with the hairstyling..)

- Would dodge a bit to get rid of some harsh shadows and then also for some shaping/carving.

- I'd either go for your toned version with a colored background or remove the toning for more natural skintones and a white bg

http://www.blog.robertlc.com/_tempfiles/borderlinebunny_beauty_suggestions.jpg

Mar 30 12 01:19 pm Link

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BorderlineBunny

Posts: 2201

Tulsa, Oklahoma, US

Robert LC wrote:
Did a good job and definitely your best in your port.

Few things you might consider
- ears, if it were a cosmetic ad beauty shot you'd probably get the request to slightly
reduce them

- hair could use some work (but it's a bit strange crop considering what they did with the hairstyling..)

- Would dodge a bit to get rid of some harsh shadows and then also for some shaping/carving.

- I'd either go for your toned version with a colored background or remove the toning for more natural skintones and a white bg

http://www.blog.robertlc.com/_tempfiles/borderlinebunny_beauty_suggestions.jpg

Very insightful. Yes, I did think about reducing the size of the ears. I did some work in matching them (one stuck out further than the other) and I can totally see that the tone is much more appealing with a toned background. All excellent food for thought.
I didn't focus too much on the hair much except for some cleanup and highlights. I think they wanted it out of the way for the photo to focus more on the face.

I originally had her not toned upon the white background and the client asked me to give her a more magazine finish so that's what I came up with. Didn't even occur to me to make the background more appropriate for it. Thank you for your critique. Good stuff.
Edit: I really like the carving you did. Her cheekbones really stand out there.

Mar 30 12 02:41 pm Link

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Robert LC

Posts: 944

Amsterdam, Noord-Holland, Netherlands

Sure, hope it helps.
I also ask clients what the use and context of the image is. Maybe the background I did doesnt match that (and I dont dislike your version, but in general I tend to see beauty ads where there's either not a lot of creative toning, or there is a real or artificial background/whitespace for text).

If this is their final crop, I'd make the hairdo more symmetrical (since you cant really get what the styling is with this crop) and clean it up some more.
Perhaps round off her right shoulder as well.

Also noticed the upperlip can use some dnb to round it up and the lower one is a bit warmer and could use some colorcorrection imo.

Gd luck smile

Mar 30 12 04:28 pm Link