Loria Harrison wrote:
I'll bet my profile is interesting!
Loria

Indeed it is. Your profile is very different from any other I have seen on MM, but so is your story. I think you do a very good job of explaining your situation, how you came to be where you are, and what your motivations and goals are in modeling.

The main question I would have about working with you is, how do we handle posing and changing outfits? You mention that you have two attendants who are familiar with every aspect of your care; I would assume they also accompany you to shoots and assist you with posing and changing. It would be helpful, at least for me, if you would spell out in detail the process and logistics of doing a shoot with you, so I know what to expect. I realize that would make your profile even longer than it already is; normally that would be a no-no, but in a special case like yours, the more information given the better.

Finally, let me say that I am sorry you have been feeling ill recently. I wish you a speedy recovery.

Emily Hayworth wrote:
I would appreciate your opinion. :-)

I gave it already, unless you are asking for my opinion on your revised portfolio?

GoldRoseMedia wrote:

I gave it already, unless you are asking for my opinion on your revised portfolio?

Yeah, I made a couple of changes, and wanted to see if it flowed better.  Sorry for not specifying.

SvetlanaK wrote:
would love to get feedback!

Your profile does not contain any red flags, however it is very wordy and could use some editing. The first three paragraphs do not tell me anything useful and could be deleted entirely.

It sounds like you have been doing mostly TF since you joined MM, and would now like to start doing some paid work. To that end, it would be helpful if you would spell out exactly what types of paid work you are seeking, or are willing to do. That would at least demonstrate whether you have realistic expectations about how far you can go in the modeling industry.

Vanisa Dimitrova wrote:
Let me know please. I would love to improve my profile.

No red flags. If anything, your profile is short on information -- I would be interested to know what genres/styles are you willing to shoot, what is your current availability, do you have any travel plans? What you do have is professionally written, it could just use a little fleshing out.

Emily Hayworth wrote:

Yeah, I made a couple of changes, and wanted to see if it flowed better.  Sorry for not specifying.

Yes, I think it is improved. It still contains a lot of information, but it is all useful, and you have trimmed it to an acceptable length.

GoldRoseMedia wrote:

I am a little confused by the logic of your tiered rates. I can understand why you would charge more for commercial work than for portfolio building, but what is the difference between editorial and artistic? Unless you are talking about artistic nudes (which I don't think you are), I don't see why artistic shoots would be so much more expensive than editorial shoots. Some clarification on what those terms mean to you would be helpful.

Apart from that, your profile is vastly improved from when I first saw it some months ago. It used to be full of red flags, but now I cannot find any at all. If this change reflects a genuine growth in your understanding of the business and the needs of photographers, then I applaud you. Well done!

I did infact mean artistic implied/nudes. I will clarify ASAP!

Thanks for the feedback!

Melodye Joy wrote:
I did infact mean artistic implied/nudes. I will clarify ASAP!

Thanks for the feedback!

You're welcome. The reason for my confusion is that you have the "Shoot nudes" box checked "No" on your profile. Also you do not have any nudes in your portfolio, only a couple of implied. I think you will find that most photographers on MM do not consider "implied nude" and "nude" to be the same thing. I don't care myself (I do not shoot nudes), just letting you know what I have observed.

GoldRoseMedia wrote:

No red flags. If anything, your profile is short on information -- I would be interested to know what genres/styles are you willing to shoot, what is your current availability, do you have any travel plans? What you do have is professionally written, it could just use a little fleshing out.

Thank you!

GoldRoseMedia wrote:

You describe your look as "alternative" -- that is good, it shows you have a realistic understanding of where you fit in the modeling world, given your large number of body modifications. You say you have an ambition to become a Suicide Girl; a lot of people on MM would strongly advise against that for legal/contractual reasons. It might be worth your time to look up some past forum threads on the subject.

No red flags, you sound like you'd be fun to work with.

Thankyou very much! I was going to take the suicide girls bit off anyway as i have since discovered being a suicide girl isn't for me!

Glad to know i didn't raise any red flags. x

GoldRoseMedia wrote:

I appreciate your stating that you are "able to legally work in both Canada and the US." That is something I always wonder about models who travel from other countries.

There are no red flags in your profile text. For me, your red flags arise from your pattern of forum behavior which I have observed over a number of years. However that would be taking this thread off topic, so I will not go into any further detail here.

Lol.... thanks?

GoldRoseMedia wrote:

I get the sense from reading your profile that English is not your first language. That's not a problem, you write well enough that I can understand you, however there are some small grammatical errors and you might want to seek help from a native English speaker to get those fixed.

I don't think this is needed:

"Please, be professional on contacting me, otherwise I will not answer."

It is a spot of negativity on an otherwise positive profile, and the unprofessional photographers will ignore it anyway.

Thanks, I will ask for some help and delete this line.

T A Y L O R  wrote:
I'd be interested. Thank you!

No red flags. I think I told you in another critique thread long ago that I consider you to be an excellent model with a good reputation, and my opinion has not changed.

I have just one thing for you to think about: I get the impression that you are being asked to shoot porn a lot, since you spend three paragraphs talking/ranting about it. Are you sure that is the impression you want to give? It would be better to have that conversation in private with the people who are asking. Better yet, don't talk to them at all, just report them to the moderators since they aren't supposed to be recruiting for porn on MM anyway.

rcaz wrote:
I would appreciate a critique. Too much life story? Too wordy?

It is a little wordy, yes. You could drop the first paragraph entirely. No one on MM cares where you came from, only where you are now.

Here are the important points I picked up from reading your profile:

- You are willing to shoot TFP.
- You are open to working with both male and female models.
- You do not shoot nudes.
- You don't have an issue with escorts.
- You prefer to shoot film rather than digital.

Those are the points that a model who is considering working with you will want to know. You should have them clearly stated at the top of your profile. The rest is just details about your process that are important to you, but models probably don't care. Move it down to the bottom, trim it, or remove it completely.

Sky Donohue wrote:
What do you think?

You sound both professional and easygoing, which is a nice combination. Your profile text is quite long and could use some editing. For example, in the travel section you could replace four sentences with one:

"Tentative travel destinations for 2013: Nebraska, Kansas City, New York, LA."

You do not have any red flags, however there is something about your profile that would prevent me personally from hiring you. That is, you give the very strong impression that you are not available for clothed work. I say this for two reasons: First, the line "I show up to set with a clean face, natural hair, and no wardrobe," which makes it sound like you have no wardrobe at all, even if it is requested. Second, the fact that you do not have a single clothed shot in your portfolio.

Since I only do clothed shoots, and since I always request the models to provide wardrobe, I would not contact you about doing a shoot, even though I might otherwise be interested. If you are exclusively a nude model then that's fine; I am sure the vast majority of people who hire you want nudes anyway. I'm just letting you know from my perspective, the tone of your profile is off-putting to people who are not interested in shooting nudes.

RenaBeana wrote:
any flags?

No, but it does sound like a newbie profile, which is a little surprising given that you have been on MM nearly five years. Actually it sounds like you have not updated it at all (apart from the bit about your tattoo) since you first joined. That is really the only impression I get from it.

GoldRoseMedia wrote:

No, but it does sound like a newbie profile, which is a little surprising given that you have been on MM nearly five years. Actually it sounds like you have not updated it at all (apart from the bit about your tattoo) since you first joined. That is really the only impression I get from it.

Ha Ha you have hit the nail on the head!

Paul Tirado Photography wrote:
Take a look and let me know. Thanks.

Your profile focuses mainly on your experience and credits. They sound fairly impressive, so for you that is probably the right approach. The only drawback is that some models might feel intimidated about asking you for a shoot. Overall it is well written and you come across as very professional.

RenaBeana wrote:
Ha Ha you have hit the nail on the head!

Well that in itself could be considered a red flag, the fact that you are five years between updates. That would lead me to believe that you are not really serious about modeling and may be a flake risk. I might take a chance on TF, but I probably would not hire you for a paid job.

chellforte wrote:
Let me know! Thanks!
I'm new here so I can use all the help i can get

I can tell from reading your profile that you are new to MM and to modeling. That's okay, everyone has to start somewhere, and you sound like you would be a cool person to work with.

The only thing that jumps out at me (because it sounds so bizarre and I have never seen anything like it on a model profile before) is this:

"I am willing to lose about 10 pounds for model work but I must be given a reasonable amount of time, at least two weeks."

I am trying to envision how this would work. So if I message you and tell you I want to hire you, but only if you lose 10 pounds, you will immediately put yourself on a diet just for me? Then you say you need at least two weeks, which sounds very unhealthy (I think normally it would take 5-6 weeks to lose 10 pounds unless you go on a crash diet). Supposing you do lose 10 pounds and we shoot, what then -- you gain it back until the next time a photographer asks you to lose 10 pounds, then repeat the process?

Please understand, I am not poking fun at you, rather I am trying to illustrate how absurd it sounds. I have read your "too fat to model" thread so I know this is something that is on your mind. Personally I think you look quite good, however if you feel that losing weight would improve your self confidence and open up better modeling opportunities for you, then do it on your own initiative, don't wait for some photographer to demand it.

I wish you the very best of luck with modeling, and I hope to see more from you in the near future.

GoldRoseMedia wrote:
You sound both professional and easygoing, which is a nice combination. Your profile text is quite long and could use some editing. For example, in the travel section you could replace four sentences with one:

"Tentative travel destinations for 2013: Nebraska, Kansas City, New York, LA."

You do not have any red flags, however there is something about your profile that would prevent me personally from hiring you. That is, you give the very strong impression that you are not available for clothed work. I say this for two reasons: First, the line "I show up to set with a clean face, natural hair, and no wardrobe," which makes it sound like you have no wardrobe at all, even if it is requested. Second, the fact that you do not have a single clothed shot in your portfolio.

Since I only do clothed shoots, and since I always request the models to provide wardrobe, I would not contact you about doing a shoot, even though I might otherwise be interested. If you are exclusively a nude model then that's fine; I am sure the vast majority of people who hire you want nudes anyway. I'm just letting you know from my perspective, the tone of your profile is off-putting to people who are not interested in shooting nudes.

I shortened my travel section, thank you for that. You're correct that I don't shoot clothed, but I hope that by "off-putting" you mean that people who might want to shoot me clothed won't be interested in working woth me, rather than I come across as rude to those people. I'm fine with the first one, but if I seem rude or negative then I would like to change that if you have any advice.

Sky Donohue wrote:
You're correct that I don't shoot clothed, but I hope that by "off-putting" you mean that people who might want to shoot me clothed won't be interested in working with me.

Yes, that is exactly what I mean. And since you are not interested in shooting clothed, it's cool.

Acanthus Tattoos wrote:
I'm interested in your opinion, thanks!

You have done a good job of explaining what you are about, and what you hope to get out of modeling. No red flags.

John Cowan wrote:
I'd love to hear your opinion!

Thanks
John
x

There isn't much on your profile except your "terms of shooting" which come across as demands. Not that there's anything unreasonable about them, it's just a little off-putting when the first thing I see on your profile are a bunch of rules and regulations. You would be better served by using your profile to list your selling points -- the reasons why photographers would want to work with you. Work out the terms of shooting in private after a photographer has contacted you about doing a shoot.

Wolfe Tundra wrote:
I'm interested.

Your profile text is very short and to the point. I am an advocate of keeping things succinct, however I do feel that your profile could use a little fleshing out. Try to come up with a few unique selling points -- the reasons why a model would choose you over the thousands of other photographers in California -- and list them on your profile. You could also talk about specific concepts you are interested in shooting; maybe one of them will pique a model's interest.

Melodye Joy wrote:
Hi Gold!
I fixed what you had suggested and I also added a recent tear from my most recently published work. Should this be something I should keep on my profile, interchanging as the latest/last publication releases? Or is this just another turn off and considered clutter to fellow artists or potential clients?

I appreciate your continued feedback,
Thanks!

Hello again. I don't think there is anything wrong with highlighting your recent work on your profile, as long as you keep it down toward the bottom (near the credits) so I don't have to scroll down to read your profile text. Actually I am far more impressed by your unedited/no-makeup photo. That is a very good image of you, and I always appreciate seeing an unretouched snapshot.