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Artist/Painter

inklusions

Posts: 614

Odessa, Texas, US

this is a new piece of mine done with ballpoint pens,
tell me what you may or may not like about it
https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/150312/14/5502057a8a2ce_m.jpg

Mar 12 15 02:34 pm Link

Photographer

SV FOTO

Posts: 28

Tucson, Arizona, US

I like it, well done.

Is there a way for you to work your magic and get the fire ball down to a 25% transparency?
As of now it is in the background but it is as clear as the model.

So is this image about the model and the fireball, the other way around or the prospective got messed up along the production process?

Mar 12 15 04:29 pm Link

Artist/Painter

inklusions

Posts: 614

Odessa, Texas, US

Thanks!! my original intention was to make the background look like a pinup circle that her hair caught on fire, pens a tricky and it went in another direction so i just left it alone, only way to change it now is to start all over

Mar 12 15 06:41 pm Link

Photographer

Schlake

Posts: 2935

Socorro, New Mexico, US

My only comment is that it pushes the blue/orange thing a little far for my tastes.

Mar 12 15 07:08 pm Link

Artist/Painter

Art Hermetic

Posts: 302

Leeds, England, United Kingdom

The effect is expected, given your choice of complementary colours. The bold colouration is what makes the image work.

Mar 12 15 07:31 pm Link

Photographer

Rob Photosby

Posts: 4810

Brisbane, Queensland, Australia

Art Hermetic wrote:
The effect is expected, given your choice of complementary colours. The bold colouration is what makes the image work.

Or not work - it looks like the cover of a comic book to me.

Mar 13 15 08:54 am Link

Photographer

MIDNIGHT EXPRESS

Posts: 579

Pomona, California, US

inklusions wrote:
this is a new piece of mine done with ballpoint pens,
tell me what you may or may not like about it
https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/150312/14/5502057a8a2ce_m.jpg

good work

Mar 13 15 08:06 pm Link

Photographer

GER Photography

Posts: 8463

Imperial, California, US

Rob Photosby wrote:

Or not work - it looks like the cover of a comic book to me.

People make a good living penning comic books!:-)

Mar 13 15 08:14 pm Link

Photographer

Account Dead dead dead

Posts: 243

London, England, United Kingdom

It's not really my cup of tea to be honest but the fact that you used ball point pens to achieve this is very impressive. There's no doubt you have talent.

Mar 16 15 01:49 am Link