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Hey guys, Just finished a few edits from my shoot with Ashlee. Would love constructive criticism https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/43072857 https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/43072855 https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/43072854 https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/43072852 https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/43072853 https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/43072849 https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/43072850 https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/43072851 Sep 16 17 06:49 am Link You're clearly using a good lens and getting great bokeh! I like the lighting for the most part, and the composition is good on most. A couple of the shots with pink flowers seem a little crowded at the top of the frame. Maybe try doing some head shots with the model's head tilted forward slightly more and see if you like the result. Sep 18 17 05:03 am Link  Here is my opinion, the hair and flowers blocking her face may be artistic and great to hang on the wall as a gallery wrap, but for trying to sell the model you are loosing 25% of her face. Details hair band on models right wrist, right elbow pointed at camera. The colored shorts are a big distraction, for me a solid white pair may work better. Would also prefer her left hand fingers to be extended so they are long and lovely  Great capture of her eyes That big blurred object at the top right of models head is very distracting Arms are squashed against models sides, move them out a bit so elbows are not touching her sides, this will allow her shape to show better [Again would prefer her face not to be blocked by the flowers in a modeling portfolio]  Portrait orientation in a models portfolio for a head and shoulders shot may be better [When I first saw this image I thought she was picking her nose] Without the hand to her head, and left side of photo crop off this would be a nice image  Wish hair were not in front of models left eye, and that right eye were sharper Do like the simple blurred background in this photo  Foe me less head tilt, not a fan of partial right hand Over all you captured a very relaxed mood, well done  Very interesting image, you created a nice diagonal through the image with the models body, shows her shape well. [Long lovely fingers would top this image off]  This feels a bit like a mug shot, would prefer a vertical image [Move arms off to sides a bit, place body on angle to camera] Not crazy about the horizontal lines cutting through her  Arching her back would help with straitening out material by her stomach. Placing her body on a slight angle to camera would add dynamics. Over all you are creating some great images; you know how to use your camera and the environment I wish you well Sep 18 17 06:04 am Link I think Lee's Photography's advice was spot on. I'm sorry I don't have time to properly do a critique but I think Lee covered all bases well. One thing I would say is that some of the blur looks a little bit unnatural. If you are adding blur in post, I would try tone it down. Other than that, I would be proud. Well done. Happy photographing! Sep 18 17 07:46 am Link Kapturelab wrote: He made some very good pointers that I'll definitely watch out for. Thank you Lee. Sep 19 17 02:02 pm Link all very nice works... agree with most points made above Sep 19 17 04:28 pm Link |
