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OTTO poste1
Posts: 191
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada


hey guys, constructive criticism please. ta.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120425/13/4f98599f9ecfd.jpg

rollover : http://jejland.deviantart.com/art/lady-eye-298393657
Apr 23 12 08:47 am  Link  Quote 
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Retouch007
Posts: 403
East Newark, New Jersey, US


I really like it. But there are a few small things I might consider checking out particularly background the colors are breaking up I forgot what that is called. A tiny bit d&b on the nose stands out to me and a tiny bit color correction to bring the reds and yellows a little closer to each other you can try that with the selective color perhaps. Oh, I feel like u took a little to much under her right eye I might bring that back a bit it looks like she has no fold there. Maybe to do something with the ear perhaps liquify to make look nicer. Overall, nice job.
Apr 23 12 09:19 am  Link  Quote 
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OTTO poste1
Posts: 191
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada


Rg Retouching wrote:
I really like it. But there are a few small things I might consider checking out particularly background the colors are breaking up I forgot what that is called. A tiny bit d&b on the nose stands out to me and a tiny bit color correction to bring the reds and yellows a little closer to each other you can try that with the selective color perhaps. Oh, I feel like u took a little to much under her right eye I might bring that back a bit it looks like she has no fold there. Maybe to do something with the ear perhaps liquify to make look nicer. Overall, nice job.

Thanks for the feedback, appreciated!
yup, I can see the banding too.. I am guilty of seeing it before and not having made the change before posting smile
you are right too about the folds under the eyes, she looks artificial there now.
I'll liquify the ear so it's a little rounder, I see it's a little yellow on the part closer to the face.
After a second look, there is even an eyelash I added that's bugging me on the middle upper part of her left eye.
By bringing the reds and yellows closer to each other, I am not quite sure what you mean. Maybe adding some blue to the brighter side of her face so it doesnt look so yellow, is that it?
For the D&B on the nose, do you mean her right nostril (that's where I see it's a bit faked), or another part?

Thanks again for your feedback.smile

Apr 23 12 10:01 am  Link  Quote 
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Retouch007
Posts: 403
East Newark, New Jersey, US


yes, on the right side. Never mind the color correction I think it's my screen it looks orange with with some red dots scattered here and there but if that is true for yours also check out the selective color and play with the magentas and yellows for the red and yellow to bring into balance. Also, I checked the before and after on the her left side of forehead I like the original better it looks like you went too far in into the forehead, the d&b needs to be more modulated there (dark moving into light).  Thanks for sharing I learn from you also. Take care
Apr 23 12 10:40 am  Link  Quote 
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OTTO poste1
Posts: 191
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada


Thanks for the replies.
New version is up with the changes. For some reason the color is a bit off comparing to the photoshop file, more yellowish and the banding appears with the compression. 
Up for more criticism. cheers.
Apr 23 12 04:54 pm  Link  Quote 
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Koray
Posts: 6,688
Ankara, Ankara, Turkey


Peach fuzz on her nose and hard shadow line on her chin are quite distracting. I also would clean the stray hair on her ear, make the overall color less yellow and more even.

you also should lean how to display your work best possible way.
Apr 24 12 04:46 am  Link  Quote 
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OTTO poste1
Posts: 191
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada


Koray wrote:
Peach fuzz on her nose and hard shadow line on her chin are quite distracting. I also would clean the stray hair on her ear, make the overall color less yellow and more even.

you also should lean how to display your work best possible way.

Cheers for the comment, will fix that up.
Would you know how I could save my photos so they appear like the photoshop file. I save them as compressed jpegs.. obviously does not work.

Apr 24 12 05:13 am  Link  Quote 
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Koray
Posts: 6,688
Ankara, Ankara, Turkey


Convert a copy to srgb before saving as a jpg and adjust a bit more if necessary.
then save as jpg.

Remember always to make a copy before messing around with the final look.
Apr 24 12 05:59 am  Link  Quote 
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OTTO poste1
Posts: 191
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada


ok, I am finally making sense of what Koray was saying, which is pretty clear now I fgured what you were talking about.
Apr 24 12 08:47 am  Link  Quote 
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OTTO poste1
Posts: 191
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada


Actually, anyone knows of any good material to learn about color profile, how they work etc..? cos not understanding is driving me bonkers.

edit. ok i am getting my head round to it now.. breathing.
Apr 24 12 08:57 am  Link  Quote 
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Aleksandr Olkhovskiy
Posts: 164
Novosibirsk, Novosibirsk, Russia


ottoretouch wrote:
Actually, anyone knows of any good material to learn about color profile, how they work etc..? cos not understanding is driving me bonkers.

real world color managemenet book

Apr 24 12 09:03 am  Link  Quote 
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OTTO poste1
Posts: 191
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada


Aleksandr Olkhovskiy wrote:

real world color managemenet book

Cheers

Apr 24 12 09:17 am  Link  Quote 
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OTTO poste1
Posts: 191
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada


ok, managed to get it up with the colors i chose and made the changes. If anyone sees anything else I should change, criticism time is open again.
Apr 24 12 10:41 am  Link  Quote 
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Ashish Arora
Posts: 2,064
Singapore, Singapore, Singapore


I like your approach.

Some things that really catch my eye -

1. You tried to apply uniform skin tone on the skin. Looks fake.

-The image starts to look boring.

2. There is a little color spill of it around the model's face all over, bleeding into the backdrop.

-You need to check your mask.

3. The blacks are too light for my taste and flat-ish.
Apr 24 12 12:44 pm  Link  Quote 
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OTTO poste1
Posts: 191
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada


Ashish Arora wrote:
I like your approach.

Some things that really catch my eye -

1. You tried to apply uniform skin tone on the skin. Looks fake.

-The image starts to look boring.

2. There is a little color spill of it around the model's face all over, bleeding into the backdrop.

-You need to check your mask.

3. The blacks are too light for my taste and flat-ish.

Thanks for the reply.
True dat, I was a bit lazy on the mask.
I did think it started to lose life too but I couldn't tell where it came from. Blacks and too uniform it is.
I am learning so much on this photo I am going whiiiiz.

Apr 24 12 02:05 pm  Link  Quote 
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OTTO poste1
Posts: 191
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada


last changes made. open for critics

http://jejland.deviantart.com/art/lady-eye-298393657

cheers guys.
Apr 25 12 04:40 am  Link  Quote 
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