Go for it! Jan 24 13 07:17 pm Link Maruschke wrote: Hi, your current profile: I know I've been on here for a while but I took a bit of a break, I got married and had babies but now I'm back. My suggestions: My name is Maruschke Barnard. Jan 25 13 06:00 am Link Jose Deida wrote: Your current profile: Jose Deida is not a renowned photographer from Brooklyn NY who relocated to PA. His work doesn't really pull depth and emotion through the lens and it's easy to see how he has not made a name for himself in the industry. My suggestions: Jose Deida is not a renowned photographer from Brooklyn NY who relocated to PA. His work doesn't really pull depth and emotion through the lens and it's easy to see how he has not made a name for himself in the industry. I get the humor/sarcasm, but the thing about it, is that it can scare people off who might not "get it" -- but maybe that's what you want, so I'm not going to mess with it too much, just put in a disclaimer and take out the cussword. Style is style... Jan 25 13 06:09 am Link Thank you. Jan 25 13 06:46 am Link Oh if you're still doing that I would love that! Feb 24 13 12:45 am Link I would appreciate you advise Feb 24 13 12:49 am Link Feb 24 13 12:49 am Link I'm in if you're still going. Feb 24 13 08:29 am Link My turn now ? Feb 24 13 08:44 am Link Oh, I'm stream of consciousness, elaborately excessive and about to redo and create an alt port so this is great! Feb 26 13 03:05 am Link I would love some advice on my profile. Feb 26 13 11:04 am Link OOPS. I first thought you were asking for a copy edit of YOUR writing. Well, for what it's worth, here it is (and feel free to critique my profile, if you like -- fair's fair ). I am an agency represented model. or I am represented by ____ agency. I need little direction, but take direction well. I am professional and always come prepared. (Switch first two sentences.) (Paragraph) I have clear, smooth skin, thick, natural hair, and clear, natural nails. I am available for travel throughout New England and regularly visit the Boston. I don't do erotica or fetish. Thanks for looking. (drop the exclamation point unless you are screaming out those words.) Credits (insert colon -- : ) I've appeared on television (give an example or two), in commercials and print ads, catalogs, (ONE comma) and fashion shows. (Paragraph) I appeared in Taylor Swift's POPULAR music video ("Mine") (italics, no parenthesis or quotes) [s]that was[/i] featured on Top Video Countdowns. I have worked with so many fantastic artists. ♥ (I don't know what this means. Cut it. It seems unnecessary. ) I'll be graduating with (insert "a") Masters (degree) in Human Resource Management in July. (Ummmm, I'm not sure if this is relevant to the modeling, but maybe a nice personal interest detail.) Also, mention any relevant interests and experience, such as professional or special dance (Latin, ballet,ballroom, etc.) , gymnastics, yoga, singing (or any kind of performance experience), do your own makeup and hair?, have your own wardrobe?, acting experience (any at all, pro or not), etc. (I could do an even tighter edit, but there are these are my basic impressions.) Feb 27 13 06:27 am Link I'm sure I could use some help! Mar 10 13 01:03 pm Link Profile writing is the hardest thing for me. So please help! Thanks Mar 13 13 01:01 am Link I never had a flair for the written word Mar 13 13 01:08 am Link |