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Photographer
sammyspade
Posts: 98
Portland, Oregon, US


Which are the keepers from my most recent shoot?

Thanks! 

I'll go post a comment on what I think is your best image for helping me out.
Feb 12 13 01:42 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Melodye Joy
Posts: 542
Rancho Cucamonga, California, US


The first image is dull because her eyes are so emotionless, unfortunately.
Also, I'd advice you tweak and brush out some of her neck wrinkles, as she a tiny model, her neck placement seemed to have been poor. That comes with learning, I myself have a difficult time keeping my neck up, yet natural, especially when laying down.

Photo #2; I'd of slipped both nips, the idea of the jacket open on one side and not the other is a tad off. Rather than being artistic, it looks point of fact, sloppy. I'd also have tried her legs down rather than up, curled like that seems to make the model heavy in the tush...the lighting is far too bright as well, for her fair skin.

Photo #3; You have lost her eyes in her bangs. You never have a model look directly to the side/corner, her profile should be noticed, and the illusion of a straight on image be made. Also, the shadowing from the blue light, though creative seems to have overshadowed her corset (on the right)...Always think in small detail. smile

Photo #4: has too much white/background to the right of it. I personally would have preferred it cut down to size, unless the piece was to be used for editorial/article text or title.

Photo #5: She is lit to little on the left side. You want to make her a silhouette, not so invisible you can barely tell there is a person there (unless you open the image link). Side note; her arms/shoulders to her side look too stiff. That comes with model practice though smile

Photo #6: You cut off her forehead. That'd be okay if there was a little more to her head, but it just looks off putting at that crop. Again, slightly stiff arms/shoulders. Of the two, I would personally forgo the color image and keep it b&w in this case and concerning photo #5.

I know I was harsh and overly detailed in my critique, so let me ask..what do YOU want from your photography? If your ideal capture was in natural setting, natural stance, natural beauty...then your doing well. If you want to dig deeper and pull out that hidden grain of gold, with the concept(s) of choice, then you need to work on lighting, which will reduce your processing in your choice of photoshop material.
Also, placement when it comes to the models. Don't hesitate instructing the models, giving us ideas, showing us what to do/not to do we all like to get great images for our portfolio(s)!

Hope this helps you smile
Bless!
Feb 13 13 11:10 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Melodye Joy
Posts: 542
Rancho Cucamonga, California, US


The first image is dull because her eyes are so emotionless, unfortunately.
Also, I'd advice you tweak and brush out some of her neck wrinkles, as she a tiny model, her neck placement seemed to have been poor. That comes with learning, I myself have a difficult time keeping my neck up, yet natural, especially when laying down.

Photo #2; I'd of slipped both nips, the idea of the jacket open on one side and not the other is a tad off. Rather than being artistic, it looks point of fact, sloppy. I'd also have tried her legs down rather than up, curled like that seems to make the model heavy in the tush...the lighting is far too bright as well, for her fair skin.

Photo #3; You have lost her eyes in her bangs. You never have a model look directly to the side/corner, her profile should be noticed, and the illusion of a straight on image be made. Also, the shadowing from the blue light, though creative seems to have overshadowed her corset (on the right)...Always think in small detail. smile

Photo #4: has too much white/background to the right of it. I personally would have preferred it cut down to size, unless the piece was to be used for editorial/article text or title.

Photo #5: She is lit to little on the left side. You want to make her a silhouette, not so invisible you can barely tell there is a person there (unless you open the image link). Side note; her arms/shoulders to her side look too stiff. That comes with model practice though smile

Photo #6: You cut off her forehead. That'd be okay if there was a little more to her head, but it just looks off putting at that crop. Again, slightly stiff arms/shoulders. Of the two, I would personally forgo the color image and keep it b&w in this case and concerning photo #5.

I know I was harsh and overly detailed in my critique, so let me ask..what do YOU want from your photography? If your ideal capture was in natural setting, natural stance, natural beauty...then your doing well. If you want to dig deeper and pull out that hidden grain of gold, with the concept(s) of choice, then you need to work on lighting, which will reduce your processing in your choice of photoshop material.
Also, placement when it comes to the models. Don't hesitate instructing the models, giving us ideas, showing us what to do/not to do we all like to get great images for our portfolio(s)!

Hope this helps you smile
Bless!
Feb 13 13 11:10 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
sammyspade
Posts: 98
Portland, Oregon, US


That's a ton - all very, very helpful comments.  Thanks for taking the time out to write it!
Feb 13 13 12:59 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
lizzie lennon
Posts: 4
Pottsville, Pennsylvania, US


I've been trying to get some real advise on my profile I want do be a good llama and yes I know I'm heavy that's nothing new to me please help me out tell me any thing and everything wrong with my profile any thing I should try inseted of what I'm doing please help
Feb 14 13 11:14 am  Link  Quote 
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