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Square Jaw Photography
Posts: 362
Odenton, Maryland, US


I consider myself well-read and professional on this site (don't we all?) but perception is reality. When you read my profile text, what is your vibe about me?
Feb 25 13 06:44 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Lee_Photography
Posts: 8,526
Minneapolis, Minnesota, US


To many I this, I that, I will especially in such a short bio

I reserve friend
I have worked
I am a U.S.
I have recently
I love any artistic
I truly enjoy capturing
I am not against shooting
I am interested in shooting.
I am doing TF right now,


[As Written]
I reserve friend requests for people I have worked with, or want to work with. No fly-bys please!

[Suggested re-write]
Friend requests are reserved for people that have worked with me, or looking forward to working with. No fly-bys please!
Feb 25 13 06:54 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Square Jaw Photography
Posts: 362
Odenton, Maryland, US


Lee_Photography wrote:
To many I this, I that, I will especially in such a short bio

I reserve friend
I have worked
I am a U.S.
I have recently
I love any artistic
I truly enjoy capturing
I am not against shooting
I am interested in shooting.
I am doing TF right now,


[As Written]
I reserve friend requests for people I have worked with, or want to work with. No fly-bys please!

[Suggested re-write]
Friend requests are reserved for people that have worked with me, or looking forward to working with. No fly-bys please!

Thank you! I actually never would have thought of that. Too many "I's" in it. Much Obliged!

Feb 25 13 04:12 pm  Link  Quote 
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