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Raymond Woods
Posts: 21
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania, US


Jun 02 13 11:50 pm  Link  Quote 
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Images by MR
Posts: 7,741
Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada


Raymond Woods wrote:
Hey,

Didn't really retouch these images. Felt like I got it right in the camera already. Tell me what you think?


http://www.flickr.com/photos/shotbyraywoods/8756056274/

http://www.flickr.com/photos/shotbyraywoods/8756056238

http://www.flickr.com/photos/shotbyraywoods/8756056190/

http://www.flickr.com/photos/shotbyraywoods/8756056160

I would disagree.

Jun 03 13 12:01 am  Link  Quote 
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Raymond Woods
Posts: 21
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania, US


Images by MR wrote:

I would disagree.

Oh how so? Just curious

Jun 03 13 12:04 am  Link  Quote 
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Images by MR
Posts: 7,741
Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada


Images by MR wrote:
I would disagree.

Raymond Woods wrote:
Oh how so? Just curious

Well for starters the second one isn't even in focus
http://www.flickr.com/photos/shotbyrayw … otostream/

Jun 03 13 12:07 am  Link  Quote 
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Oscar Partida
Posts: 732
Palm Springs, California, US


i like them
Only the  3rd might look better B & W ........or something about the cropping......or the forehead overexposed calls my attention
Jun 03 13 01:13 am  Link  Quote 
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Matthew Gwinn
Posts: 129
Ypsilanti, Michigan, US


#1 What is he doing with his hands? It looks like he is picking a wedgie, and since he's eyes are closed it looks like he's really focused on it.

#2 is out of focus

#3 is the best of the 4, but still needs some work. I would have moved the trash can out of the shot.

#4 is ok

It's generally bad composition to cut people's feet off. As a rule you don't want to crop at the joints (ankles, knees, waist, elbows, etc.).

You might want to invest in a reflector or at least a couple $3 white foam boards. Or just use fill flash so you don't get so many shadows
Jun 03 13 10:55 am  Link  Quote 
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Mark Salo
Posts: 8,355
Olney, Maryland, US


#4: I would like to see some light in his eyes.
Jun 03 13 11:11 am  Link  Quote 
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Raymond Woods
Posts: 21
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania, US


Matthew Gwinn wrote:
#1 What is he doing with his hands? It looks like he is picking a wedgie, and since he's eyes are closed it looks like he's really focused on it.

#2 is out of focus

#3 is the best of the 4, but still needs some work. I would have moved the trash can out of the shot.

#4 is ok

It's generally bad composition to cut people's feet off. As a rule you don't want to crop at the joints (ankles, knees, waist, elbows, etc.).

You might want to invest in a reflector or at least a couple $3 white foam boards. Or just use fill flash so you don't get so many shadows

Great feed back. All that you said is pretty much what I said and my teacher said.
I do hate cutting joints on but sometimes naturally you "just don't care" when shooting.

Jun 03 13 03:56 pm  Link  Quote 
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RachelReilly
Posts: 1,730
Washington, District of Columbia, US


You need: a reflector or travel lights and to do some photo editing/ retouching
The colors look flat.
Jun 04 13 04:20 pm  Link  Quote 
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DBVE Imaging
Posts: 1,907
Fort Worth, Texas, US


Cutting off the top of heads, feet etc. does violate then"old established rules", but fashion shooting today totally disregard that and involves crops that are right for showing the garment etc., regardless is a foot is cropped.
Jun 04 13 04:33 pm  Link  Quote 
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Marin Photography NYC
Posts: 7,235
New York, New York, US


I think the rail behind him sticking out of the models head hurts the composition. 3&4
Jun 04 13 04:34 pm  Link  Quote 
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Tim Roper
Posts: 146
Palo Alto, California, US


Those all have a very current editorial look to them.  Very good job handling the light and shadows.  It's not easy dealing with direct sun, but when you want that look, and get it right, it pays off (filling them in would ruin the look).

That metal railing is a little annoying though.  And the second one could use a bump in exposure, and in general a sitting down pose like that, that foreshortens the upper leg, always looks a little weird.  Those are better shot from the side I think, one leg up--that kind of thing.

Composition is just unexpected enough to make them not boring, but not too crazy either (again, except for #2--straight on isn't working).

If it was a model test shoot, his agency should like them.
Jun 04 13 04:40 pm  Link  Quote 
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AJ_In_Atlanta
Posts: 12,801
Atlanta, Georgia, US


I agree there was no need to waste time retouching these.  You need to learn compisition, look for things in the background that are distracting or take away from the story (or stick out of people's head) and get your subjects in focus.
Jun 04 13 04:49 pm  Link  Quote 
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Raymond Woods
Posts: 21
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania, US


Tim Roper wrote:
Those all have a very current editorial look to them.  Very good job handling the light and shadows.  It's not easy dealing with direct sun, but when you want that look, and get it right, it pays off (filling them in would ruin the look).

That metal railing is a little annoying though.  And the second one could use a bump in exposure, and in general a sitting down pose like that, that foreshortens the upper leg, always looks a little weird.  Those are better shot from the side I think, one leg up--that kind of thing.

Composition is just unexpected enough to make them not boring, but not too crazy either (again, except for #2--straight on isn't working).

If it was a model test shoot, his agency should like them.

Thanks for the feedback. Understand where you are coming from. Still a work in progress

Jun 05 13 11:15 pm  Link  Quote 
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