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Photographer

Bonn Sotto

Posts: 9

Windsor, Ontario, Canada

Hi everyone. Just added a few pics in my port. Feel free to browse and critique be it harsh or good. But please be constructive and offer advice how to improve.

Apr 12 14 05:29 am Link

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Thomas Van Dyke

Posts: 3233

Washington, District of Columbia, US

Bonn Sotto wrote:
...how to improve.

Bonn, nice start into portraiture...

That said, had you used either a reflector or fill flash to illumination the talent's face this might have worked a tad better...  the shadows here are beyond a 1:3 ratio...

That said, the warm orange halter works well and harmonizes with this talent's skirt... excellent wardrobe selection...  and superb pose dynamic... wonderful synergy...

https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140223/11/530a522c531a6.jpg

However the crop doesn't compliment the narrative... there are rules... never crop at an ankle is one of them...  if you are challenged for space, then lose the 85mm and go with a standard 50mm prime... this would have allowed you more freedom in post to select the best compositional elements...

Hope this helps...

All the best on your journey...

Apr 12 14 05:58 am Link

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Eyesso

Posts: 1218

Orlando, Florida, US

Photo #3 is not such a good angle for her.  And the whole bottom row can go. 

I think you are really good with light, and composition. 

TFP is good....but certainly as part of our hobby we invest in cameras and software to make our pictures better.  Why not invest in models who you know can deliver more striking poses?  A couple paid models can boost the overall quality of a photographer's portfolio and give you more TFP responses to choose from.  So....paying a model is a good investment. 

She's coming to your area  https://www.modelmayhem.com/1047004 

So is she  https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/11311/0

Apr 12 14 06:04 am Link

Photographer

Bonn Sotto

Posts: 9

Windsor, Ontario, Canada

Thank you guys for your insight.

Apr 12 14 08:57 am Link

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