Chris Angelo wrote:
Ya something like this will be good. Go for it.

This has got to go.  Where to start.  Did you even attempt any lighting?  Focus is your friend.  But of course the total lack of contrast makes this flat.   The total lack of interaction between the models, they might as well be mannequins.  Do you have a foot fetish, do we really need to have that tennis shoe coming into our face.  Just stop doing this now.

Angels  Deadly Syn 2 wrote:
shoot

Get rid of this NOW!  You're a retoucher?  This must be the before by accident.  Look at all the blemish still on the skin.  Sure we want to keep texture, but blemish need to go.  That crappy blur under the eye - really you want us to see that kind of work.  The ahalf lip color.  If it was the concept, then make it pop, otherwise fix it.

Delete this and start over.

Orcatek Photography wrote:



Get rid of this NOW!  You're a retoucher?  This must be the before by accident.  Look at all the blemish still on the skin.  Sure we want to keep texture, but blemish need to go.  That crappy blur under the eye - really you want us to see that kind of work.  The ahalf lip color.  If it was the concept, then make it pop, otherwise fix it.

Delete this and start over.

Thanks I will go back to the drawing board the half lip was the concept I will fix it

James Ogilvie wrote:
Sure, have at it.

Don't understand all those comments liking this.  I see why you hid it on the second page.  Now hide it back on your computer.   Doesn't fit the rest of your "style" at all.  The "floating balls" look silly and gimmicky.  You should be better than that.  Maybe you were drunk when you did this.  If you continue this type of work you might as well but your camera on craigslist.

Orcatek Photography wrote:



Don't understand all those comments liking this.  I see why you hid it on the second page.  Now hide it back on your computer.   Doesn't fit the rest of your "style" at all.  The "floating balls" look silly and gimmicky.  You should be better than that.  Maybe you were drunk when you did this.  If you continue this type of work you might as well but your camera on craigslist.

lol!  Thanks!  I needed a good chuckle.  Well done!

Mini_ wrote:
pick me!

Delete, delete, delete and don't look back.  The body position and crop are crapola.   Did you even know they were taking you're picture?  Just crop everything but your face out of this photo and it might be acceptable.

Laura Ann - Fashion wrote:
Hit me

Well it is pretty obvious by this why you do limited TFP.  Can you create a more forced posed?   How about framing the face with the arm instead of running it thru the face?  And how could you not see that armpit mess.  And fingertips on the butt, not holding on for fear of falling.  I want you to take your camera and apologize to it and promise not to do this again.

Matthew Davids wrote:
Me

Really??  You think flashing your abs like a drunken coed flashing her boobs is a good pose.  Maybe we should all throw you some mardi gras beads.  And your expression looks like your looking down and not seeing what you hoped for.   I know, you were hoping for a better picture.   Maybe you should add a caution tape photo to your port to keep us from noticing this photo.

Nor-Cal Fine Art Studio wrote:
Go

Your concept is right, this is trash.   Model was so ashamed she only did it wearing sunglasses to conceal her identity.   If you want to be creative you have to get out of the box, or trash as the shot shows and break new ground.  How about putting a model in a cardbox or a sack or on toilet.  It been done, and done better.  Buy a lighting DVD and create some drama.  Remember you are working on Fine Art, not look what I can do.

coripops wrote:
MAde it just in time!

Even though your 17, you should still know to go to the bathroom before your shoot.  Sitting on a chair trying to hold it in ain't going to make it fashion.  Your arms have joints to bend, use them.   Awkward pose are nice in fashion, but this is only half way there.  Look at V and Italian Vogue and learn before it's too late.

Lesmouches wrote:
Have at it.

This is supposed to be a model portfolio, not a photo my friend took with their cell phone.  Just delete this and never ever post anything like this again.  Maybe that's why you don't show your face it this one.

Orcatek Photography wrote:



This is supposed to be a model portfolio, not a photo my friend took with their cell phone.  Just delete this and never ever post anything like this again.  Maybe that's why you don't show your face it this one.

I find it heartening that you hate the one that I didn't shoot myself. Thanks for the honest scathe! ^_^

Jessica-Dee wrote:
Did I make it?

Not sure what you were thinking.  Talk about a blurry mess.  This is not a lucky accident, and if you did it on purpose you are sadly out of touch.  The movement is obvious of a handheld oops.  It does not create a cool effect.   You want to drag the shutter, then control your motion and people will buy it.

Willie Sheldon wrote:
I'm game.

Why oh why did you post this.   Have you never see a crop tool.  That negative space over the head is not doing anything for you.  And you really need to learn to light low key.  If you put dark hair on a low key, you better light it to separate them from the background or you can just continue creating crap.  It's really up to you, just don't make me look a them again.

MKPhoto wrote:
Me. Love smell of critique in the morning. And have way too much crap to choose from

https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/1 … c5d058.jpg

When you try and fail, there is no need to show to the world.  But you had to just trot this eyesore out for all to suffer through.   We all know what this should look like when done right, and this is not it.   Go down to your local college and enroll in digital photography 101.  Probably day 2 or 3 they will teach you how to do this right.

CarolyneMarieFerraro wrote:
Me me me!

Oh look you're a dancer.   If you couldn't do that pose I would be surprised.  Gripping the heal like it's trying to get away is silly - and you should know better.  Both hands need to be graceful.  And bring that chin up a bit for a better line.  Don't let your dance instructor see this.  Sloppy, Sloppy, Sloppy.

Orcatek Photography wrote:

https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/1 … c5d058.jpg

When you try and fail, there is no need to show to the world.  But you had to just trot this eyesore out for all to suffer through.   We all know what this should look like when done right, and this is not it.   Go down to your local college and enroll in digital photography 101.  Probably day 2 or 3 they will teach you how to do this right.

Quite unexpected choice lol,

Gonna trash it when a few people here have a chance to see what not to do...

Ash Turner wrote:
If you decide to do more then 10

https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/1 … d43a4f.jpg

You asked for it.  Trying to prove you can do slutty too.  Only a few changes and it might have not been such a mistake to show.  Get one of those feet off the ground to create a better line.   And if we saw the other hand it might help too.  It has no place being in your portfolio, so get rid of it before every GWC get's all bent out of shape.

Jillian Marie Root wrote:
feel like doing 1 more? trying to clean up my port...

The best part about this photo is it will soon be deleted.  Was your hair trying to blow away?  You seem to like to put your hand on your head, enough already.  The shadow thru your armpit is a mess.  Shadow on your cheek looks like a scar.  And leg position is just not doing you any favor either.  So save us all and delete this one.