The eye in the shadow is just to PS lit. The stray hairs, well you have to do it 100% either keep em or loose them, Not sure if the thing that is coming out of her top on her back should stay, looks like a shoe horn. Overall it's okay, but lacks character. When you have such brilliant colour, you have to push for a balance , a play on soft hard, bright dark , saturated, desat, etc to make it work.
Ex of lots of clr
ex of a side gel'd shadow but with less imapct