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I recently shot the two images below, and am looking for critique on them to help me establish which one to keep in my portfolio. This is my first critique on MM!   Thank you for your opinions! Dec 31 12 08:39 am Link Porcelain Perspective wrote: I like the model choice. Dec 31 12 05:32 pm Link upon first glance i thought the bottom but then i clicked both and the top is better to me. they are 2 different shots with the same model ... Dec 31 12 07:29 pm Link In the top image: the leaves and berries aren't blurred enough to allow the attention to go straight to the model. It plays a focusing trick on the eyes due to not enough blur. The view to the model feels obstructed due to so much foliage framing the image. It's sort of a Peeping Tom look. Second pic is much better. I don't know if you do much retouching, but the bruise on her hip isn't flattering, nor is the sharp angle formed by the corset and her hip. Just barely a little curving of that corner would be more flattering. I would also like to see the other hand on her thigh or holding one of the branches, rather than cut off. Jan 01 13 09:01 am Link focus on the girl first and foremost. she's beautiful. think about her expression. her face, her eyes, is an expression. her pose is also an expression. i agree also with the comments about the broken hand. it just seems awkward. all of that said, the photos are far from terrible. you definitely have talent that just needs to be nurtured, and that comes with practice, and more practice. but you will get there. being an artist is a journey. take it one day at a time. Jan 01 13 09:50 am Link Thank you everyone for the encouraging criticism. I'm going to look at what else I got from our shoot and see what I can do  Jan 01 13 10:29 am Link Mark Laubenheimer wrote: Yeah, in case that wasn't clear from my comments. I don't think the images are bad, but for serious critique the most useful thing to point out are the flaws, not what you did right. Jan 01 13 03:58 pm Link |
