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Ryan South

Posts: 1421

Baton Rouge, Louisiana, US

Hi Folks,
  Anybody care to weigh in on which of they like best?  Any critique is also welcome.  I'll be happy to comment on one of your photos for anything substantial. Thanks in advance,
Eric
https://ericliffmann.smugmug.com/photos/i-MrfNq5K/2/XL/i-MrfNq5K-XL.jpghttps://ericliffmann.smugmug.com/photos/i-nqT2twB/3/XL/i-nqT2twB-XL.jpghttps://ericliffmann.smugmug.com/photos/i-khDJJxp/2/XL/i-khDJJxp-XL.jpghttps://ericliffmann.smugmug.com/photos/i-m7RLK9J/2/L/i-m7RLK9J-L.jpghttps://ericliffmann.smugmug.com/photos/i-dSwnNcF/2/XL/i-dSwnNcF-XL.jpg or the color version https://ericliffmann.smugmug.com/photos/i-qQxckQd/1/XL/i-qQxckQd-XL.jpg

Jan 02 13 12:14 pm Link

Photographer

Good Egg Productions

Posts: 16713

Orlando, Florida, US

My picks are #2 or the last one.

It's usually a good idea to turn the girl's hips a little rather than shooting straight on.  The camera often makes her look heavier than she is when it's straight on like you've done in most of these shots.

Jan 02 13 12:20 pm Link

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Azimuth Arts

Posts: 1490

Toronto, Ontario, Canada

I'm not sure any of them are fantastic, but would probably pick the last one. 

I actually quite like what you were trying to do with the first, but the massive white column on the right takes up far too much of the frame.

Also, a general note (and I am guilty of this far too often) is the creases in the dress.  In some of the images they are not flattering, and in most distracting the worst offender being number 4.

In number 3 her face is a bit too underexposed.

In number 4, the model is too small in the frame, at least with her legs cropped as you have - with that much background I really would prefer to see her feet.  And your watermark/logo is far to distracting covering almost half of the model in this shot.  If you feel you need to include a watermark, try to position it so that it does not interfere significantly with your subject.

Although I said I liked the last best, I do not care for the hand.  It looks as though you captured it a bit too soon/late as she was moving it.

That said, one of these shots is probably worthy of addition to your portfolio as these represent an improvement over a couple of the shots you already have.

Just my $0.02
Scott

Jan 02 13 12:36 pm Link

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Brightonn

Posts: 234

New Orleans, Louisiana, US

#1 has a great natural candor.  I also like the fact that I can also see the mode's face better in the final shot.  The color version doesn't really cry out to me, but the black and white version emphasises the theme and works well with the urban landscape.

Jan 02 13 12:58 pm Link

Photographer

Ryan South

Posts: 1421

Baton Rouge, Louisiana, US

anybody like this one?  I tried some split toning in Lr.  How do you find the effect? 
https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130103/09/50e5c20298962_m.jpg
here's one of the previous with a different crop
https://ericliffmann.smugmug.com/photos/i-fNrKqqB/0/L/i-fNrKqqB-L.jpg and a similar onehttps://ericliffmann.smugmug.com/photos/i-MWJGrJd/0/L/i-MWJGrJd-L.jpghttps://ericliffmann.smugmug.com/photos/i-NCZfwKz/2/L/i-NCZfwKz-L.jpg   Again, I'll be glad to leave a comment on one of yours.  Thanks

Jan 04 13 10:21 am Link

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RachelReilly

Posts: 1748

Washington, District of Columbia, US

The horizontal crop with the fountain

Jan 04 13 10:48 am Link

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Drew Smith Photography

Posts: 5214

Nottingham, England, United Kingdom

In your second set the last pic takes my eye. Her pose shows off her beautiful curves whilst at the same time showing her face.

Jan 04 13 10:58 am Link

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paragonfl

Posts: 293

Saint Petersburg, Florida, US

ELiffmann wrote:
anybody like this one?  I tried some split toning in Lr.  How do you find the effect? 
https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130103/09/50e5c20298962_m.jpg
here's one of the previous with a different crop
https://ericliffmann.smugmug.com/photos/i-fNrKqqB/0/L/i-fNrKqqB-L.jpg and a similar onehttps://ericliffmann.smugmug.com/photos/i-MWJGrJd/0/L/i-MWJGrJd-L.jpghttps://ericliffmann.smugmug.com/photos/i-NCZfwKz/2/L/i-NCZfwKz-L.jpg   Again, I'll be glad to leave a comment on one of yours.  Thanks

I like the top 1.  Suggest you have the model pull the horizontal lines out of the front of the dress... hard to think of while shooting but get rid of the lines and you have a different image. my 2 cents

Jan 04 13 10:59 am Link

Photographer

Steve Wall

Posts: 644

Sydney, New South Wales, Australia

ELiffmann wrote:
anybody like this one?  I tried some split toning in Lr.  How do you find the effect? 
https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130103/09/50e5c20298962_m.jpg
here's one of the previous with a different crop
https://ericliffmann.smugmug.com/photos/i-fNrKqqB/0/L/i-fNrKqqB-L.jpg and a similar onehttps://ericliffmann.smugmug.com/photos/i-MWJGrJd/0/L/i-MWJGrJd-L.jpghttps://ericliffmann.smugmug.com/photos/i-NCZfwKz/2/L/i-NCZfwKz-L.jpg   Again, I'll be glad to leave a comment on one of yours.  Thanks

I like the second one here. I think it has the most going on. It feels like it might have a story behind it. As for the rest, she's looking at camera, the location doesn't add much, they're very straightforward, unremarkable outdoor portraits.

Jan 04 13 02:01 pm Link

Photographer

Lee_Photography

Posts: 9863

Minneapolis, Minnesota, US

Azimuth Arts wrote:
I'm not sure any of them are fantastic, but would probably pick the last one. 

I actually quite like what you were trying to do with the first, but the massive white column on the right takes up far too much of the frame.

Also, a general note (and I am guilty of this far too often) is the creases in the dress.  In some of the images they are not flattering, and in most distracting the worst offender being number 4.

In number 3 her face is a bit too underexposed.

In number 4, the model is too small in the frame, at least with her legs cropped as you have - with that much background I really would prefer to see her feet.  And your watermark/logo is far to distracting covering almost half of the model in this shot.  If you feel you need to include a watermark, try to position it so that it does not interfere significantly with your subject.

Although I said I liked the last best, I do not care for the hand.  It looks as though you captured it a bit too soon/late as she was moving it.

That said, one of these shots is probably worthy of addition to your portfolio as these represent an improvement over a couple of the shots you already have.

Just my $0.02
Scott

Totally agree with Scott

Jan 04 13 02:09 pm Link