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Model

Shauni Mary Jane

Posts: 986

Thief River Falls, Minnesota, US

I will tell you one bad and good thing I notice about your port. I'm sure I'll give suggestions to improve as well, if possible.

EDIT 11/6: Moving slowly, but moving.

Nov 01 12 08:09 am Link

Model

Axioma

Posts: 6793

Gent, East Flanders, Belgium

I'll take one please smile

Nov 01 12 08:13 am Link

Model

Shauni Mary Jane

Posts: 986

Thief River Falls, Minnesota, US

_Mini wrote:
I'll take one please smile

Good:
I've been following your work for quite awhile now. You are a very talented model that always seems to be improving.

Bad:

There is not really anything bad to say about you, to be quite honest.

So, I'll just share the image I think is weakest in your port:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121025/11/508981ce6be1f_m.jpg

Nov 01 12 08:59 am Link

Model

MissLaurelle

Posts: 3532

Montreal, Quebec, Canada

yes please smile

Nov 01 12 09:11 am Link

Photographer

OmnyRa

Posts: 1029

Indianapolis, Indiana, US

Still at it?

Nov 01 12 06:12 pm Link

Model

Maggie Xia

Posts: 452

Atlanta, Georgia, US

Would love your input smile

Nov 01 12 06:48 pm Link

Model

Shauni Mary Jane

Posts: 986

Thief River Falls, Minnesota, US

MissLaurelle wrote:
yes please smile

Good:

You are absolutely adorable with a hint of sexy. You have a well-developed and diverse port. You are very good with expressions and posing. It was refreshing to not see much repetition.

Bad:

These don't meet the quality of the rest of the image in your portfolio, they are the weakest(imo). You could definitely do without them:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120910/00/504d924aa23a4_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120910/10/504e266242806_m.jpg

As I stated above, you are an overload of cuteness. I think that this is also your downfall. You work best at being cute/nerdy cute, but you haven't conquered other looks quite as well. I think you would benefit by trying to successfully rock different styles.

Nov 01 12 07:42 pm Link

Photographer

DAN CRUIKSHANK

Posts: 1786

Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada

ok!

Nov 01 12 07:47 pm Link

Model

Rachel Hayslette

Posts: 205

Weaver, Alabama, US

Tell me!

Nov 01 12 09:11 pm Link

Photographer

Images by MR

Posts: 7776

Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada

I need all the help I can get...

Nov 01 12 09:18 pm Link

Model

Jojo West

Posts: 972

Silver Spring, Maryland, US

Me please smile

Nov 01 12 09:45 pm Link

Photographer

fgvphoto

Posts: 59

Culver City, California, US

Me Please  thx

Nov 02 12 01:11 am Link

Model

Yin L

Posts: 264

London, England, United Kingdom

nodnod! yes please!

Nov 02 12 01:18 am Link

Photographer

Alluring Exposures

Posts: 11360

Mesa, Arizona, US

Merry Jane wrote:
I will tell you one bad and good thing I notice about your port. I'm sure I'll give suggestions to improve as well, if possible.

I'm probably killing the thread by posting like I usually do... but go ahead!

Nov 02 12 01:30 am Link

Model

Zoe Chanel

Posts: 164

Sydney, New South Wales, Australia

Would love to know smile

Nov 02 12 02:22 am Link

Model

Shauni Mary Jane

Posts: 986

Thief River Falls, Minnesota, US

OmnyRa wrote:
Still at it?

Good:

You are great at glamour/lingerie work. You have the ability to capture the sexiness in a woman.

Bad:

I think you have way to many images in your port. To many mediocre images, and few great images. I would really cut down to a few of your best.

Instead of suggesting the ones to get rid of, I'll suggest the ones you should keep:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110403/21/4d99424e03e41_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121017/20/507f73c873255_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120912/11/5050d41ae9aeb_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120911/15/504fc14a8ed23_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/111215/20/4eeac6c3318db_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120620/19/4fe28baeb9e95_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121017/16/507f3ebcf0ac5_m.jpg

Nov 02 12 06:33 am Link

Photographer

Erin Dawson Photography

Posts: 334

Olney, Maryland, US

yes please, if you're still playing.
thanks in advance.

Nov 02 12 12:31 pm Link

Photographer

fgvphoto

Posts: 59

Culver City, California, US

Yes Please
Thx for your comments

Nov 02 12 03:22 pm Link

Model

winking_wonder

Posts: 5637

New York, New York, US

Please do!

Nov 03 12 03:02 am Link

Model

Allie Jane

Posts: 53

Los Angeles, California, US

i would love to hear! big_smile

Nov 03 12 03:08 am Link

Model

Alicia Hansen

Posts: 1744

Durango, Colorado, US

I want to know! smile

Nov 03 12 05:16 am Link

Model

Egle Aida Damulyte

Posts: 375

London, England, United Kingdom

me ?

Nov 03 12 05:52 am Link

Photographer

Jorge Kreimer

Posts: 2393

Los Angeles, California, US

Sure!

Nov 03 12 08:27 am Link

Photographer

Eclectic Vision

Posts: 8215

Toledo, Ohio, US

Please

Nov 03 12 02:53 pm Link

Photographer

Yvette Antoinette

Posts: 358

Amersfoort, Utrecht, Netherlands

I would like to know what you think.

Nov 03 12 03:00 pm Link

Photographer

TDSImages

Posts: 857

Salt Lake City, Utah, US

I'll play...

Nov 03 12 05:30 pm Link

Clothing Designer

Chain Reaction

Posts: 529

Grand Rapids, Michigan, US

Hit me with our best shot! Fire away!

Nov 03 12 09:17 pm Link

Model

Ariel Yu

Posts: 42

Los Angeles, California, US

I'd love to know your opinion!

Nov 04 12 01:46 pm Link

Model

Maruschke

Posts: 543

Darfield, Canterbury, New Zealand

Me? :-)

Nov 04 12 02:25 pm Link

Model

Shauni Mary Jane

Posts: 986

Thief River Falls, Minnesota, US

Emmiq wrote:
Would love your input smile

Good:
You have a very lovely look, and a beautiful physique!

Bad:
The images in your portfolio are bland, and didn't really catch my attention. Maybe try some more conceptual, or themed work.

Your expressions and posing are weak, and there is not much of variety to be seen. Keep on practicing in front of the mirror, and finding posing/expression inspiration!

Nov 04 12 02:46 pm Link

Model

Lucy Breeze

Posts: 49

Markham, Ontario, Canada

Me too big_smile

Nov 04 12 06:50 pm Link

Photographer

DanaBarrett Photography

Posts: 1030

Franklin, Tennessee, US

If you are still up for it, I would like to hear your thoughts.

Nov 05 12 01:36 pm Link

Photographer

James Reed Photography

Posts: 196

Tulsa, Oklahoma, US

Sure, if you're still going. Thanks.

Nov 05 12 01:44 pm Link

Model

Shauni Mary Jane

Posts: 986

Thief River Falls, Minnesota, US

DAN CRUIKSHANK wrote:
ok!

Good:

Your black and white nude work is brilliant!

Bad:

When it comes to clothed work, the images are very interesting, but what kills the images are the wardrobes and styling. Hiring or working with some wardrobes stylists/MUA would really help.

Nov 05 12 04:02 pm Link

Model

Shauni Mary Jane

Posts: 986

Thief River Falls, Minnesota, US

Rachel Hayslette wrote:
Tell me!

Good:

You have the potential to be a good glamour or commercial model.

Bad:

Most of the work in your portfolio is mediocre at best. Some aren't very flattering. This is mostly to blame on the photographer, though some of your posing and expressions are weak and un-confident. Of course I would suggest to keep on working with better photographers who will benefit your portfolio. Practice makes perfect. wink

I would also suggest getting rid of these:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121028/21/508e0aba830f3_m.jpg

There is another in your port from the same shoot. It is much to similar. I like one with the straight angle better.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121101/21/5093472a2a422_m.jpg

You look cute, but the pose is weak and unoriginal. Also, the quality of the image is horrendous.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120824/11/5037ca417eaa7_m.jpg

Unflattering.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120824/11/5037cb29c0bd5_m.jpg

Unflattering. The shadow on your stomach makes you appear a little bigger in that area than you are. The arm cross looks uncomfortable and stiff. And the expression looks forced and nervous. The softness from post processing isn't helping either.

Keep growing!

Nov 05 12 04:17 pm Link

Model

Rhiana Gray

Posts: 61

Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada

yes please smile

Nov 05 12 04:29 pm Link

Model

Shauni Mary Jane

Posts: 986

Thief River Falls, Minnesota, US

Images by MR wrote:
I need all the help I can get...

Good:

Your images are well-done(crop, editing, composition, lighting, etc.)

Bad:

You do well in the technical aspect, but you lack vision. They aren't interesting enough to catch my interest. So, I would suggest trying some more conceptual or themed work.

I really would love to see more nude/topless work in the near future. Those were the images that really did catch my interest in your port, and not just because of the nudity. They were also interesting and well done. I think you could excel and make a lot of progress in the art nude genre.

Nov 05 12 05:14 pm Link

Model

Lakin S

Posts: 308

Ashland, Kentucky, US

Need some advice on the newbie photos wink

Nov 05 12 05:30 pm Link

Model

Shauni Mary Jane

Posts: 986

Thief River Falls, Minnesota, US

Jojo West wrote:
Me please smile

Good:

The first two images in your port really captured my attention. You would do really well in fantasy themed, and conceptual shoots.

Bad:

There is a lot of repetition in your port. Images from the same set, just different poses. Choose the better one, and throw out the other.

I would keep practicing with your poses and expression. They are a bit weak, but with a few more shoots and practicing in the mirror, I'm sure you will conquer it.

Nov 05 12 05:49 pm Link

Model

Maria Susanti

Posts: 546

Banyuwangi, Jawa Timur, Indonesia

me?

Nov 05 12 07:17 pm Link