I would like to get some critiques and reviews. If I should keep going in this direction

https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/45696953

This is the contest thread, not a place for such a post. In the general forum, there IS a category called "Industry Forums" and the 1st thread under that category is "Critique" - you can choose "Serious Critique" or "Fun & Games". So.

https://www.modelmayhem.com/forums/thread/8

That should link you directly to the "critique" thread of the forum. If it doesn't, just go to "forums" at the top of most MM pages and find it under "industry forums".

Hopefully you'll get what you're looking for there.

The contest thread is for the on-going contest only, not really for discussion or personal posts.