Kelsey -Scamp- Swan wrote:
I've seen you've done this with a few models, you've not only told them why a shot sucks, but you've told them what to do to make it better artistically. I'm desperately seeking to broaden my horizons and I would love to be told what I'm doing wrong. (or right? That couldn't hurt either =] )
Thanks.

You have 16 pictures. Do not use folders. You will piss people off.


This is horrible.
Do you think you are well represented?
If you saw this is someone elses port, what would you think?



You look awkward. It is out of focus, and boring.
The railing is distracting, as is the whiter wall behind your head.

18+ https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/15408852
This looks like a snapshot your bf took. To take your port to the next level delete this kind of crap.


I would not want to work with you if this is the way you emote.


This is overexposed.

Jessica Kemski wrote:
Readysetgo. c:

Prom pictures, *none* of them, belong in your port. This is amatuer.

This is all senior photos.


This is the only non-senior photo picture, and the lightings off.

Damianne wrote:
Sure. I'll roll with it. Always love a more in depth critique.

I dont know how to tell you how bad this picture is. It makes my ill.
Your face sucks. Open your eyes, and I dont want to see your brain either.
Your arm is dead. Bend it.
Youve completely lost your other arm.
Just bad.


You look pissed and like you should have a unibrow...Bad expression


Neck lines should be taken out in photoshop. As should your stray eyebrow hairs. This is not flattering.

kitkat21 wrote:
I'm new so I don't expect a good review...I just need some help learning what's good from what's bad.  Please do me!

If you dont learn to emote youre going to become a same face model. Dooooomed to walk the earth with no emotion.

Practice in the mirror. While youre getting your hair done, or doing it yourself. I dont care. Just do it.


Part of our jobs as models is to do something incredibly painful or awkward and make it look effortless and comfortable. This does not embody that at all.


Your fingers are cut off in the photo and your face is dark. Some photos need editing.


Watch your hands. This would be a sexy image if you had some sort of expression and a more relaxed hand.

Work on your hands and face.

Cytotoxic Bunny wrote:
Savage me! I know I'm crap, but I want to know WHY.

This does absolutely nothing for your port. Remove


Badly lit, harsh shadows, and your face is a completely different color than your neck. I dont understand the green tone.


Do this concept with a different photog on location.


Horrible pose, face and your arm is cropped. And get better locations. And lighting.


Not one part of you looks good here.

MVK Photo wrote:
me please

These two photos seem out of place in your port




Get actual models to do the modeling.

Kelli Kickham wrote:
Yes please.

I'm frustrated about a few things and I need a little outside kick in the butt as well.

Hello Kelli! I hope your Valentines is awesome

"*Mastering how to raise one eyebrow. "

Todd c Hartman wrote:
I always miss the honest critiques.  Any time or interest in coming back to it?  I'm in.

I dont really know how to critique you. All of your stuff is so processed its hard.

Hate:
https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/16124100

https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/15812585



Love




https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/15948227



https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/1955676

(links are 18+)

Bobbie-Jo Lyne wrote:
Ill join in, if you are still going with this...

These are doing nothing for your port




This is pretty aweful. Too much makeup, and its not well done. The lighting is bad, and catches the wrong textures. All together it makes you look like an overweight transvestite.

Mature
https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/15037294
This is overprocessed. Your skin looks gross towards your feet.


This would be good if it was in focus

fotopfw wrote:
I sure can use your honest critique, you're doing great so far!
Paul

First.
Get rid of the pictures in your port where the models skin is grey.
Bad bad bad.

Second.
I dont enjoy a majority of your photos, youre definitely not a GWC, but if youre going to be a studio-family-senior photo type photographer, then you need to learn lighting.

Do so and come back with better photos.

SaraThornton wrote:
procede

First.
"Procede" is spelled proceed.

Second.
Your skin is insanely orange. I would suggest protecting your skin from tanning beds and the sun.

I would ditch the photos where your limbs are cut off at joints. The first three photos are examples of this.


The b&w's like this dont have any real values to them


This is repeated


This makes you look hugely wide.

Jemma Craig wrote:
I could do with some criticism

JEMMA

Your avi would not make me want to work with you

Your pictures are very very low in quality.

"I have just started out and have done 1 fashion and bridesmaid shoot all on the one day!"

You decided to use the numerical form of "one" and the written form in the same sentence. Using the written form both times will make you look more professional.

Theres not much to crit. You need to study. Hard.

Deadlynightshade wrote:
Have a stab at it:

1. Lost her right hand in the fabric, and the harsh shadow along the left side of her face bugs me. Frizzy flyaways distract from the face. Cropped the elbow...

2. I enjoy this one more. I wish she wasnt centered.

Lisa Levin wrote:

I dont like your pinup. Your first pic is alright, but because the photog cropped right before the shoulder, it makes it look like you have incredibly broad shoulders.


Cropped fingers.


Senior photo? Eyebrows are fucked dear.

Jef von Berg wrote:
Shaun! Hit me!

I enjoy your work when its simple, and not overly processed. And selective color irks me.

https://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/16571572
This is stunning

While these types of shots


Are not. You have lost all texture. You may as well had photographed a barbie doll.


You need to watch out on how white you make the eyes. This is laughable.

Lady Vailen wrote:
minus the fact I have no shoot photos yet, but critique my face and makeup instead please (oh and the boobs, they won't go down. I tried and don't know how to wear nice tops to make em look flattering)

Ive critiqued you before, havent I?

Anyway...

If you have dark eye makeup on, you need to keep your lips more on the natural side of things or you end up looking like a clown.

Come back with shoots and I will crit you

MonkieC wrote:
Okay, I'm in. Not much to look at, and slightly scared of what you'll think, but want to improve so I'm up for the brutality. Thanks!

Your avi makes it look like your tongue is sticking out.
And its a weird crop...


This brings your port down. No expression and weird tint


Do not enjoy the overexposed background, or the soft light that blends into your hair. Or the expression.


This is awesome

amycore wrote:
I'm still working on building my port and would love constructive criticism.

No.
This photo is bad.
It looks like youre poking yourself in the eye. Probably because the makeup sucks. Lazy eye, loss of hand and fat arms. Keep your arms away from your body...they shouldnt be pressed against you, especially for close shots like this.


Mess.


You shouldnt crop right at the eye socket.


This is so overprocessed.

Danielle C Wyszomirski wrote:
i want to hear it !

I wish this wasnt cropped at your forehead. I like it otherwise.

Theres not much else to say.

Some of your stuff confuses me.

Jillian McDonald wrote:
eeeeek me please

You shouldnt model.


We never show our brains to our photographers.
Keep your chin down. You also need to watch your double chin. Its very pronounced in a majority of your photos.


Your face should be better lit. And watch your hands. You can clench your fists, but you have to make it look pretty. Its our job as models to make things that other people cant make beautiful or comfortable look effortlessly eye appealing.

If you want a chance in this industry you need to practice

A lot.

I wish you luck.